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debbierose
debbierose Member Posts: 403
edited 2. Nov 2009, 18:37 in Community Chit-chat archive
he came upon me silently, swiftly,wrapping me with lava
enveloped in his arms he took me down to the depth of pain
further and far-er,
slipping deeply in a hazy heady heated like an entwined twisted
tree' I ask, beg, plea whine why me?


I did not invite it into me I was not open to its touch
it invaded me, drinking gulping made famished by a healthy soul
how did he find me I was not looking for this faceless stranger
and why? want and take so much
what did I do
I wanted not its furthered, wrenching, slavish demands
chained to a feathered wooden cell, it drives its ache,ing
need deep into me I arch my body curving up and down throwing my arms and legs about, trying failing to displace his pain the sort only it can make
there is no peace there is no where to flee

but come the day light which slowly brings in comforting light
I know I taught it with all my power thought and meager fight
I empower myself with coloured small shapes, some welcomed powerful medicines
a small amount every day makes for a mighty sword
that wipes it from my body least until his return
I'll be ready, aware and armed with defence
for after all I have my soldiers, my friends, my doctrines
it wont come so cleverly, so silently or swiftly as he did before
never will he enter me uninvited, unheard.

this darkness this pain this thing we call Arther
is not the powerful monster it once was
time has now passed it has twisted, mauled and floored
this gentle soul. which bravely fights each day as it comes
for only the fools and weak of heart would let this pain
become a welcomed life's partner.

Take liberty not!! Arther you are not welcome into this temple, into this threshold this home I call mine
I hide my heart, my body, my Midas
for all your hurt, pain, tiredness
you are only a virus


there you are let me know what you think is it good useless or bad.
i won't mind any comments
cos if you like it I wrote it if you don't Dexter Did.

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  • dachshund
    dachshund Member Posts: 8,936
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
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    Hi Rose and dexter.
    you are both good writers.
    and that took a lot of hard work and time.
    now you need a good drink of tea to get your energy back. joan xx
    take care
    joan xx
  • carol71
    carol71 Member Posts: 131
    edited 1. Nov 2009, 13:17
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    Rose, (& Dexter Doodle) What a very thought provoking piece of literature you've penned there :D

    Carol xxx
  • debbierose
    debbierose Member Posts: 403
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    carol71 wrote:
    Rose, (& Dexter Doodle) What a very thought provoking piece or literature you've penned there :D

    thank you (I think) wish I could spell
    lilitiy should read liberty
  • chris7
    chris7 Bots Posts: 2,696
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
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    Hi Rose (are you happy with Rose now or is it still Debs) :)

    A very moving and heartfelt piece. Now I understand why you have some very bad nights, but I like the fighting spirit you portrayed. Good for you for battling. Glad you posted it and think perhaps this forum was the right place, so many on here will identify with it.
    Well done
    Chris
  • trisher
    trisher Member Posts: 9,263
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    Hi Rose

    That's good. Keep up the good work. Very interesting how we all perceive arthur.

    Love Trisher xx
  • debbierose
    debbierose Member Posts: 403
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    trisher wrote:
    Hi Rose

    That's good. Keep up the good work. Very interesting how we all perceive arthur.

    Love Trisher xx

    hey you how are you, i see you've been tied to a pole all day
    i have a story of a pole i'll tell you later,
    time you were settled down for the night young lady. have they straighten your bed and pumped up your pillows, and have you had your warm drink.
    now good night lovely. see you tomorrow,
    lol
    Debbie Rose.
  • frogmorton
    frogmorton Member Posts: 29,430
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    Hi
    Well done you!
    That must have taken some writing!
    'Sort of' had a happy ending :)
    Which bits did Dexter do? :wink:
    Toni x
  • debatat
    debatat Member Posts: 659
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    That was a very powerful poem, I enjoyed it. It conjured up how you feel about arthur very well. It must have taken you ages.

    Deb x
  • valval
    valval Member Posts: 14,911
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    hi rose had tears in my eyes and then smile on my face it was great caught the feelings just right thanks
    val
    val
  • debbierose
    debbierose Member Posts: 403
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    thank you so much for liking my poem
    I embarrassed to say it didn't take me hours for ages I just typed it as I would a post.

    actually I didn't know it was going to come out like that, I was thinking of what rummey reminds me of, its like a vampire or some thing coming into your room.
    if that makes sense.
    bloody thing.
    I'll beat this you will see. there has to be an answer. somewhere.
    I'm going to get my self educated and cure my self. I'll share with all of you.
    all free of charge.
    I've decided nothing is going to take anything away from me unless i give it away freely and with good will.

    THERE!!!!
  • valval
    valval Member Posts: 14,911
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    good for u girl that the attitude, he will not win as i feel u will get him under controll good luck
    val
  • skezier
    skezier Member Posts: 11,333
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    Hi Debbie,

    Its a very good poem and I think the best ones are the ones that just sneak out more than the ones planned if that makes sense?

    Love your attitude on not giving anything up less wiling...... sort of works for me.

    Tell Dexter he is a clever boy but which bits did he write? Take care Cris x
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