An experiment in creative writing

joanlawson
joanlawson Member Posts: 8,681
edited 15. Jan 2010, 12:35 in Community Chit-chat archive
Hi

This is an experiment in creative writing, and I would like your help.

It is just for fun, and to see how it turns out. It is up to you whether you make it serious or amusing.

I will begin the story, and then you can follow on.

THE RULE is that you can only write a maximum of 4 sentences, as long or as short as you like.

However, you may contribute as many times as you want to.

If two people post at the same time, choose the one you would like to follow on from.

To maintain the continuity of the story, do not do' Reply with quote', but read the previous paragraph, and then carry on.
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  • joanlawson
    joanlawson Member Posts: 8,681
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    THE OLD HOUSE ON THE HILL

    It was early morning when Jenny first noticed the old house on the hill. She had been walking to meet her friend, Tom, when she took a wrong turn in the road, and now she was lost. Then all of a sudden, there it was in front of her, this strange, almost derelict house, which mysteriously seemed to demand her attention. The windows were grimey and dark, so she couldn't see inside, but the door was open, so Jenny tentatively pushed it open and slowly walked in.
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  • margaretschild
    margaretschild Member Posts: 197
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    The door creaked loudly as our heroine pushed it and stepped inside.

    The watery sun light tried to seep through the grimy windows, exposing a dingy sitting room.

    There was a painting on the wall.

    There was something alluring about the Lady in the picture, with her crinolin dress of sparkling Red and her long dark hair tumbling about her shoulders.
  • annie_mial
    annie_mial Member Posts: 5,614
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    The ground was hard and cold beneath her; as her senses returned, she realised she was lying down. Cautiously opening her eyes all she could see at first was the light shimmering between the leaves of the tall tree overhead. Becoming gradually aware of a presence, she turned her head slowly and looked straight into the eyes of the woman in the portrait. Even as she looked the eyes and face faded and as she sat up, she realised that she was in the garden of the house and all alone.
  • valval
    valval Member Posts: 14,911
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    well it was the house, but all was new and full of people dressed in old clothes. as she looked around the lady in the painting came up and welcomed her she introduced her to the most hansom young man(looked like rehab). they walked out into the garden talking both staring into the eyes of the other head and shoulders in love. he said my mother said my true love would appear one day but i never trully belived her.
    val
  • joanlawson
    joanlawson Member Posts: 8,681
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    Jenny walked back into the old house, feeling elated that she had met this handsome young man, with whom she seemed to have fallen in love instantly.

    'But what is your name?' she asked eagerly.

    'I am the Doctor', he replied, in a deep and and slightly other-worldly voice.

    'The Doctor?' she asked, 'Doctor Who?'
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  • bobbid
    bobbid Member Posts: 85
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    "Doctor Jekyll" replied the handsome young man. "I was called out to treat Georgina, the lady in the crimson crinolin. Have you seen her anywhere? I must find her quickly, as it will be getting dark soon ..."
  • ichabod6
    ichabod6 Member Posts: 843
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    "Well there's no place to hide round here" said Jenny.
    "Shall we have a cup of tea, me duck?"
    "Yes please, luv" replied the young doctor with his
    beguiling Lancashire accent.
    "Milk and two sugars" he added, seductively.
  • joanlawson
    joanlawson Member Posts: 8,681
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    'By Eck, luv, you make a luvly cuppa tea :!: ' continued the doctor in his wonderfully romantic tone of voice. Jenny felt a strange mixture of emotions, something like a whirlpool of apprehension and love, as she refilled the doctor's cup for a second time. She looked deeply into his eyes, but then noticed that their colour seemed to be changing mysteriously from blue to black. It was then that she noticed how hairy the backs of his hands were.
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  • bobbid
    bobbid Member Posts: 85
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    The doctor knew what would happen if he were caught out in the dark under the light of the full moon but he was desperate to befriend his new-found love who made such a wonderful cup of Yorkshire brew tea. "What bright eyes you have," she said. "All the better to adore you with", he replied. "What lovely teeth you have", she said. "But did you hear that strange howling sound ...?"
  • queenfan
    queenfan Member Posts: 563
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    Sorry that wasn't a howl, it was my stomach I've drunk too much Yorkshire tea :oops:
  • joanlawson
    joanlawson Member Posts: 8,681
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    Just at that moment, Georgina appeared in the doorway, her beautiful crimson crinolin dress shimmering in the moonllight, and she said in a commanding voice,

    'Doctor! You know that your addiction to Yorkshire tea might have fatal consequences for you'.

    But it was too late, and Jenny watched in amazement and horror, as the doctor transmogrified into a chimpanzee before her eyes.

    'That's odd', said Georgina,' I thought it was PG Tips which had that effect, not Yorkshire tea !!'
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  • skezier
    skezier Member Posts: 11,333
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    The doctor, now a chimp jumped into Jenny's arms and began rummaging in her hair. Slightly taken back Jenny prised his hands from round the back of her neck and gently put him back on the floor. She sat in a chair, not quite sure what to do. Without thinking she reached for the Yorkshire tea......
  • minky67
    minky67 Member Posts: 2,328
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    Unbeknown to her the tea was drugged. Now she was craving monkey nuts. She ran through the house ripping away at everything in her path in search of them nuts.
    she left no room untouched & the only place left to look was the attic,as she pulled down the ladder she pondered. whats is up there .......
  • margaretschild
    margaretschild Member Posts: 197
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    As she poured out the tea, her other hand felt around the table.

    No biscuits! "You cannot have Yorkshire Tea without biscuits!" She cried.

    "But they were there a moment ago" said a kind and calming voice

    "Ah! the game is a foot!!" exclaimed an excited and powerful voice.
  • valval
    valval Member Posts: 14,911
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    As she poured out the tea, her other hand felt around the table.

    No biscuits! "You cannot have Yorkshire Tea without biscuits!" She cried.

    "But they were there a moment ago" said a kind and calming voice

    "Ah! the game is a foot!!" exclaimed an excited and powerful voice.
    what game is that she replyed
    looking around the room was full of mennising looking people
    what have i got my self into she thought
    val
  • joanlawson
    joanlawson Member Posts: 8,681
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    At that moment, the man with the kind and calming voice stepped forward, and said, ' No, the game is NOT a foot, but I have it in hand :!: ' Jenny and the Menacing Ones turned to see who this person with the amazing calm voice could possibly be.

    'I am Living Legend', he announced, and I was the one who painted the picture of Georgina in the Crimson Crinolin long ago.

    'You must all still your minds, and feel the force within, and then you will enter into an Eternal World with me', he said mysteriously.
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  • jackie1955
    jackie1955 Member Posts: 632
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    Jenny was aware that Living Legend's voice was having an hypnotic effect on the Menacing Ones, who became quiet and still.

    "Come with me NOW" an urgent voice whispered, and a firm hand clasped her own and started to pull her from the room.

    "Doctor!" Jenny gasped, gazing into his handsome face once again, "your back.........."
  • joanlawson
    joanlawson Member Posts: 8,681
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    'Your back is still dark and hairy like a chimpanzee's', she said.

    'I don't believe you are human at all :!: :shock: , I think you are a wherechimp!!

    Just at that moment, Living Legend waved his magic paintbrush, and everything whirled round with incredible force.

    'You are now entering the Eternal World which I promised you', he said in his calming voice.
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  • ichabod6
    ichabod6 Member Posts: 843
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    Meanwhile, back in the tearoom, off the Empress Ballroom
    in the Wintergardens in snowy Blackpool Hercule Poirot sipped
    a glass of old and peculiar and said to himself "Hey up lad. I'm
    fed up of this chilly white stuff. I feel like solving a mystery in a
    far off land. Come on Boozer" he said pulling on the lead of his
    whippet, "Let's be gooing."
  • margaretschild
    margaretschild Member Posts: 197
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    As she slid off the two pink mountains!??? she landed on an Island in the stream.

    As she turned to look around there was her best friend Jolene.

    Who was a very productive girl and always worked from 9 to 5

    She had her arms wrapped around a rather hunky ex football player and whispered in his ear "and IIIIIIII will always love you"
  • joanlawson
    joanlawson Member Posts: 8,681
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    'Sorry', said Living Legend,'that was the wrong paintbrush I used, and I didn't intend you to come to Dollywood'.

    Taking out his Special Magic paintbrush, he waved it in the air a few times, and WHOOSH !!, Jenny found herself transported to the Eternal world which she had been promised earlier.

    'What will I find here?' she asked Living Legend, in wonder.

    'If you look carefully, you will find your heart's desire', he replied calmly.
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  • joanlawson
    joanlawson Member Posts: 8,681
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    'HELP :!: :!: ' she cried out, and turned round to find Living Legend once more standing beside her comfortingly.

    'What is that sound, and why am I in this freezing wasteland?' asked Jenny.

    'That is the blood-curdling sound of the Delhound, who roams around these parts searching for something, but he knows not what', replied Living Legend.

    'Then I will find him', said Jenny, as she was drawn towards the sound, as if by a magnet.
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  • ichabod6
    ichabod6 Member Posts: 843
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    "Down, Boozer" said Hercule P. "Find the road off this blasted
    heath. I wanted to solve a mystery in a foreign land, but this
    gaggle of authors have brought me to Dartmoor. And there's
    more snow forecast for tonight. Oh. diddley dee.
  • annie_mial
    annie_mial Member Posts: 5,614
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    Pantaloon; she discovered he had a fair number of useful objects he kept in his drawers.
    She found a whistle and with one shriek, it summoned Hercule Poirot and Boozer to her side in a instant. After some discussion, mainly in French, they decided to raid the other pocket. Amazingly, a beautiful meaty bone emerged, which Boozer promptly appropriated.
  • margaretschild
    margaretschild Member Posts: 197
    edited 30. Nov -1, 00:00
    Along with the bone, there were 3 items.

    A swiss army knife (always good for getting stones out of horses hooves)

    A loaf of bread, much needed in cornwall (I believe)



    As they pulled the third object out of the pocket there was a mighty roar.